tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post7681156858480285490..comments2023-10-01T12:16:36.158-04:00Comments on Writing in the Wilderness: Simon's PG/MG Love Scene Blogfestsarahjayne smythehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02589820347348973092noreply@blogger.comBlogger41125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-20295328261515683722010-03-16T22:14:11.448-04:002010-03-16T22:14:11.448-04:00Hi, Hayley. Thank you so much and welcome. No worr...Hi, Hayley. Thank you so much and welcome. No worries about not getting here yesterday, I'm glad you got here at all. :) And I've been over to read your entry and am following you now, too.sarahjayne smythehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02589820347348973092noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-32463062492663511272010-03-16T21:18:47.830-04:002010-03-16T21:18:47.830-04:00That was intense, very PG but intense in a good wa...That was intense, very PG but intense in a good way. I think you could write YA it'll just be out of your normal comfort zone. But I really did like this. I'm sorry I didn't get to this yesterday but I didn't know about the fest until late last night and barly had time to post my own scene! But this was so good I wish I had gotten to it earlier.Hayley Lovellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16786674202167099600noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-7642051644462718892010-03-16T07:25:17.360-04:002010-03-16T07:25:17.360-04:00Hi, Sarah. Thank you. Mean girls indeed. :)
Hi, M...Hi, Sarah. Thank you. Mean girls indeed. :)<br /><br />Hi, MG. Thank you. And yeah, you're right. It really is all about the people and the vicious repercussions.<br /><br />HI, Melanie. Thank you. And yes, My Space can be a bit much. :)sarahjayne smythehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02589820347348973092noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-6550317232100436932010-03-16T00:28:46.979-04:002010-03-16T00:28:46.979-04:00Whoa. I'm asking my daughter to cancel her my...Whoa. I'm asking my daughter to cancel her myspace! That was amazing and in such few words.Melanie Shermanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01385073936714563295noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-28229033524315429092010-03-15T23:39:14.477-04:002010-03-15T23:39:14.477-04:00I really liked how this wasn't even about the ...I really liked how this wasn't even about the act itself - it was about people. Vicious, vindictive people, but people nonetheless :) Great take!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17034419617457525778noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-71901201358123559922010-03-15T22:12:00.994-04:002010-03-15T22:12:00.994-04:00Hi, Monica. Thank you. Economy of words makes me f...Hi, Monica. Thank you. Economy of words makes me feel good. :)<br /><br />Hi, LK. Thank you for your part in spurring on this challenge. I’m glad you gave me a chance to write this.<br /><br />Hi, Terry Lynn. Thank you for reading this.<br /><br />Hey, Lola. Thank you. Your comment is full of awesome. :) I’m glad you liked it.<br /><br />Angie-Hee! Wicked is good. And I totally get the whole ‘awesome job feels wrong’ thing. :)<br /><br />Hi, Shelly. Thank you and welcome.<br /><br />Amber-I’m glad my YA worked for you. I’ve never written it and it kinda scared me.<br /><br />Hey, Tiffany. Ha! Thank you for the kind words and the pat on the back.<br /><br />Eva! Where have you been? I’ve missed you.<br /><br />Hi, Kristie. Thank you and welcome. I’m looking forward to meeting you, too.sarahjayne smythehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02589820347348973092noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-42709703474979604162010-03-15T21:56:13.544-04:002010-03-15T21:56:13.544-04:00Very snarky girls! This is a really interesting ta...Very snarky girls! This is a really interesting take. Good job!Just Another Sarahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07589166715361819941noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-158537154400029922010-03-15T21:44:09.714-04:002010-03-15T21:44:09.714-04:00Very nice job. I've enjoyed reading these blog...Very nice job. I've enjoyed reading these blogfest entries because they are such a stretch out of the comfort zone for the writers. You did a great job in taking on this challenge.<br /><br />I came back from your follow on my blog to follow you. :) Looking forward to learning more about you.Kristie Cookhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01649966564896771373noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-54685154597632388452010-03-15T21:29:10.899-04:002010-03-15T21:29:10.899-04:00Hi, Simon. Thank you so much. And thank you for su...Hi, Simon. Thank you so much. And thank you for such a wonderful challenge that demanded we expand our borders and comfort zones as writers. <br /><br />Thank you, Shannon. I’ve worked a long time one paring down my verbiage and creating a more streamlined and stark style. I’m always thrilled to hear that someone values that.<br /><br />Hi, Kristen. Thank you so much. Realistic is good. :)<br /><br />Hi, Sara. Thanks. I’m glad you think this reads authentically. And yes, girls this age do make some very self-destructive decisions.<br /><br />Hi, Nym. Hee! As usual, you are far too kind to me. And as usual, I think you are spot on. The disconnect is painful. It’s very sad and cutting. And as always, my profound thanks for your very lovely words.<br /><br />Hi, Portia. Thank you. Poor Sam indeed. :)<br /><br />Thanks, Talli. Like I said, I’m a big fan of internal dialogue. I’m glad you found this readable.sarahjayne smythehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02589820347348973092noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-28808841735524815482010-03-15T20:35:34.170-04:002010-03-15T20:35:34.170-04:00Very intense! well done.Very intense! well done.Eva Porterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14855603175280772481noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-55727191051199393312010-03-15T20:31:41.588-04:002010-03-15T20:31:41.588-04:00Hi, Christine. I appreciate that you were willing ...Hi, Christine. I appreciate that you were willing to read this. And thank you for finding it well-written. :)<br /><br />Hi, Summer. Thank you. I love wicked. That really works for me. :)<br /><br />Hi, Laurel. I'm glad this rings true for you. I really think kids mellow after 9th grade. Freshmen are still pretty volatile. I love your characterization of the prompt as a jackelope. :) It did seem pretty surreal.<br /><br />Hi, Livia and Christine. Thanks. They really can get quite nasty in their ever shifting social landscape. :)<br /><br />Hi, Carol. Thank you so much. I’m a big fan of internal dialogue. :) And yeah, it's not about the sex it's about something else altogether. All these years and I'm still amazed at some of the decision making that goes on with this age group.<br /><br />Hi, Kimberly. Thank you so much. :)sarahjayne smythehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02589820347348973092noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-87277731065494257702010-03-15T20:30:22.224-04:002010-03-15T20:30:22.224-04:00This comment has been removed by the author.sarahjayne smythehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02589820347348973092noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-55117761370480676762010-03-15T19:56:34.343-04:002010-03-15T19:56:34.343-04:00Hi, Anne. Yeah, the kids are working my last nerve...Hi, Anne. Yeah, the kids are working my last nerve, but that's because it's still three weeks from Spring Break. And yes, they really are that bad.<br /><br />Thanks, Amy. The challenge scared us all I think. :) It was tough to balance the writing, but I'm glad you liked what I managed to come up with here. I think you'll enjoy the other entries, too.<br /><br />Hi, VR. Thank you so much. Scary real works well for me. And it's funny because it never really occurred to me to write something sweet and wholesome. :) Like I said, my brain isn't wired that way.<br /><br />Hi, Tina Lynn. Thanks. I'm glad this worked for you. We were all so worried, it's good this is finally over. :)sarahjayne smythehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02589820347348973092noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-28172558896756717712010-03-15T19:52:40.209-04:002010-03-15T19:52:40.209-04:00WOW! That was intense. It may not be MG, but damn ...WOW! That was intense. It may not be MG, but damn girl! Don't say you can't write YA. This was perfect and totally realistic for the thoughts and feelings of a teenage girl! <br /><br />Give yourself a pat on the back!Tiffany Nealhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13843374938222817346noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-77807418954795468152010-03-15T19:36:33.584-04:002010-03-15T19:36:33.584-04:00This was indeed intense. I can't believe you d...This was indeed intense. I can't believe you didn't love it. This is exactly the type of YA I want to read when I read YA. :)Leigh Hutchens Burchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13974935740527936303noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-35590860188152171282010-03-15T18:59:37.426-04:002010-03-15T18:59:37.426-04:00I like this, especially the first-person thoughts ...I like this, especially the first-person thoughts in between the action. Well done!Shelley Slyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07981620646634240160noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-50061345368066674182010-03-15T18:22:09.378-04:002010-03-15T18:22:09.378-04:00Holy potatoes! that was wicked! I'd say awesom...Holy potatoes! that was wicked! I'd say awesome job, but somehow it feels... wrong. :) Very honest, intense, and riveting... Good job!Amy Staryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15448261306497185374noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-66476806031852255202010-03-15T17:48:35.600-04:002010-03-15T17:48:35.600-04:00Damn girl, you worked it out!! This rang true and ...Damn girl, you worked it out!! This rang true and fleshed out for so short a piece. It had it all; conflict, pacing, great word choices...<br />full of awesome!Lola Sharphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14394765053485642935noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-23396752228057947472010-03-15T17:39:09.038-04:002010-03-15T17:39:09.038-04:00whoa! this kept me riveted. and way to go for post...whoa! this kept me riveted. and way to go for posting it!TerryLynnJohnsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08380207155608982319noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-7618943536398184962010-03-15T17:00:51.197-04:002010-03-15T17:00:51.197-04:00Fantastic job. Your character came across full fle...Fantastic job. Your character came across full fledged and very true to life (unfortunately for other girls)LK Griffiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05520319424741799928noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-50602422001465742242010-03-15T14:59:44.353-04:002010-03-15T14:59:44.353-04:00Whew! Edgy and wonderfully descriptive with an eco...Whew! Edgy and wonderfully descriptive with an economy of words. I am impressed!Monica Enderle Piercehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08906580310155422359noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-17443598431999135452010-03-15T14:34:57.877-04:002010-03-15T14:34:57.877-04:00Wow - great job! Really like the internal dialogue...Wow - great job! Really like the internal dialogue. You've made this edgy and tense, and very readable.Talli Rolandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04780882465745107715noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-35677476542473797932010-03-15T14:27:36.505-04:002010-03-15T14:27:36.505-04:00OMG, that was intense! What a great conflict. I ca...OMG, that was intense! What a great conflict. I can feel Sam's shock. *applause*Portiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13435815819572442582noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-38415266187464908242010-03-15T14:24:10.608-04:002010-03-15T14:24:10.608-04:00These 210 words burn like acid!
There's an inc...These 210 words burn like acid!<br />There's an incredible range of sensations - as a reader - in such a little space: your words might be few, but every one of them counts.<br /><br />In the end, it's not the shock for the young age of the people involved, or the fact that they are "burning bridges" behind them, that cuts you. <br /><br />What's really painful is the awareness that there is no sharing of feelings, or emotions, or experiences. Both of these young people seem too concentrated on themselves to be really *together*: he's in the grip of his wants and needs, and she's out for revenge and self-affirmation.<br /><br />So sad...<br />And so outstanding, as usual!Maddalenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11457992684016570400noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-48967193570439727672010-03-15T14:24:07.951-04:002010-03-15T14:24:07.951-04:00Way to pack a punch with this one! What a foray in...Way to pack a punch with this one! What a foray into the mind of a snarky teenager...<br /><br />In high school, there was a girl who slept with another girl's boyfriend (I'm sure this, unfortunately, happens EVERYWHERE) just because she thought the girl acted too high and mighty. So, your piece reads quite authentically to the horrible reasons some girls decide to have sex...Sara {Rhapsody and Chaos}https://www.blogger.com/profile/09824996048264979275noreply@blogger.com