tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post495549695642460879..comments2023-10-01T12:16:36.158-04:00Comments on Writing in the Wilderness: Happy Saturday and a Blogfestsarahjayne smythehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02589820347348973092noreply@blogger.comBlogger27125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-21370326980927307212010-06-08T23:38:35.788-04:002010-06-08T23:38:35.788-04:00The bickering was really realistic my friends and ...The bickering was really realistic my friends and I do that all the time! We also have fun hanging out at the beach at night so this scene was something I could really relate to. The dialogue was so realistic! I loved it, thanks for sharing.Hayley Lovellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16786674202167099600noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-13265372790775622552010-06-08T14:07:20.876-04:002010-06-08T14:07:20.876-04:00Pure, unadulterated fun - and so amusingly real. ...Pure, unadulterated fun - and so amusingly real. This had me smiling from the start, but when I reached the point where the…sandbox partners speak, I felt this huge grin blossom on my face, and it's still there as I write.<br /><br /><i> Sarahjayne jabbed Susan with the stick. “Dead baby.”<br />Susan rolled her eyes.</i><br /><br />Thank you.<br /><br />*bow*Maddalenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11457992684016570400noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-54701366798027425432010-06-08T10:36:47.501-04:002010-06-08T10:36:47.501-04:00haha! Oh goodness, I was all confused and then I s...haha! Oh goodness, I was all confused and then I started seeing names I recognized and I laughed. Fun :)Rebecca T.https://www.blogger.com/profile/11994380364321336824noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-32501899951497004072010-06-07T08:17:57.959-04:002010-06-07T08:17:57.959-04:00As Francine said above, I like the banter. It almo...As Francine said above, I like the banter. It almost is set up more like a screenplay with all the dialogue. :)Abby Stevenshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06630840834227330806noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-74119325845080331442010-06-06T18:46:13.828-04:002010-06-06T18:46:13.828-04:00LOL about the naming!
Great dialog and sense of f...LOL about the naming!<br /><br />Great dialog and sense of fun.Eva Porterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14855603175280772481noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-35041971384770877412010-06-06T18:05:16.917-04:002010-06-06T18:05:16.917-04:00The dialogue was fun. And mmm smores. It was a lit...The dialogue was fun. And mmm smores. It was a little long for me, so I ended up skimming the least section. The only problem I really had, aside from length, is in the beginning there are so many names and I got confused. There are some great characters that are placed in the story, on the other hand.Dawn Embershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00214560861614476799noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-10600457909801651322010-06-06T17:52:37.111-04:002010-06-06T17:52:37.111-04:00That was very funny. I like playing in this sandb...That was very funny. I like playing in this sandbox, too.Mary Aalgaardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08051735579638637382noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-54109959642997463882010-06-06T17:31:13.279-04:002010-06-06T17:31:13.279-04:00Ohhh my gosh! That was fun :).Ohhh my gosh! That was fun :).Unspokenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16065870952905767595noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-55004014406272769792010-06-06T16:49:46.502-04:002010-06-06T16:49:46.502-04:00This was fun to read! Now I'm craving s'm...This was fun to read! Now I'm craving s'mores. :)Shelley Slyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07981620646634240160noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-83792643258053879722010-06-06T15:34:43.958-04:002010-06-06T15:34:43.958-04:00I love your dialogue here! A really fun read - tha...I love your dialogue here! A really fun read - thanks!Talli Rolandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04780882465745107715noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-53463350265761218632010-06-06T15:27:04.183-04:002010-06-06T15:27:04.183-04:00I love campfire scenes, and this one was great - t...I love campfire scenes, and this one was great - the way you played with the many characters and had them interact was such fun, and really well done!Sangu Mandannahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09464061265952789628noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-9470562029666870552010-06-06T11:18:45.608-04:002010-06-06T11:18:45.608-04:00First let me say I love your new picture. You'...First let me say I love your new picture. You've probably had it for a while and I somehow missed it or it was when I was away.<br /><br />Then let me add that you're going about names all wrong. Think of a characteristic of your character and then use a baby name site to see what comes up. It can be so much fun!<br /><br />I'll come back and read the entry when I'm not so jet lagged.Theresa Milsteinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03477761307315565259noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-74135803989880402192010-06-06T06:49:19.821-04:002010-06-06T06:49:19.821-04:00Group dialogue is so difficult to write. You did a...Group dialogue is so difficult to write. You did a fantastic job of keeping all the voices distinct.India Drummondhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17631171469243868505noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-55258837150077334882010-06-05T23:16:38.695-04:002010-06-05T23:16:38.695-04:00*poke poke*
He ain't dead yet.
;)*poke poke*<br />He ain't dead yet. <br /><br />;)Summer Freyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04234534550255682010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-22528496002644371442010-06-05T21:19:20.529-04:002010-06-05T21:19:20.529-04:00Nice, fast pacing - my kind of flow :) Like how th...Nice, fast pacing - my kind of flow :) Like how the action and dialogue mingle so smoothly.Joshua McCunehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17367262185912463258noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-34849567684352293652010-06-05T20:49:07.602-04:002010-06-05T20:49:07.602-04:00Wow, lots of stuff in there.
Hard to keep everyone...Wow, lots of stuff in there.<br />Hard to keep everyone straight.<br />I'm just here from the smores. ;)<br />Nice job!Andrew Rosenberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09215333688753781447noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-58923489469495190382010-06-05T20:01:25.639-04:002010-06-05T20:01:25.639-04:00Oh doll!! You know I love it *muncheshermarshmallo...Oh doll!! You know I love it *muncheshermarshmallow* especially the marshmallows and well...I love picking on the guys! lol So fun!<br /><br />Thank you - I am honored ;o) <br /><br /><a href="http://princesscourtneysbarr.blogspot.com" rel="nofollow">Visit My Kingdom Anytime</a>Courtney Barr - The Southern Princesshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14455508477182984039noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-44180535828564997632010-06-05T19:32:46.699-04:002010-06-05T19:32:46.699-04:00Very realistic dialogue. Easy to get into. Nothing...Very realistic dialogue. Easy to get into. Nothing wrong with the names either. Well done...)Denise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-29354540761280556982010-06-05T12:17:07.831-04:002010-06-05T12:17:07.831-04:00I like how you use the dialogue as a vehicle to fu...I like how you use the dialogue as a vehicle to further the plot. Good job!Alleged Authorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04869021184116123477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-47934901224361892772010-06-05T12:06:37.143-04:002010-06-05T12:06:37.143-04:00Thanks for making me married, especially to a man ...Thanks for making me married, especially to a man named Jack. I love that name. (At least I hope it was me.)<br /><br />Great stuff, really fun. It sounds just like the stuff we used to do when we were kids at the Beach House.Anne Gallagherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05816355522284492131noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-52640283617934730012010-06-05T11:32:50.506-04:002010-06-05T11:32:50.506-04:00Excellent dialogue! Very well done.
(Lola says, f...Excellent dialogue! Very well done.<br /><br />(Lola says, fanning her cards again, after removing her...flip flops. ;)<br /><br />Happy weekend, love!Lola Sharphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14394765053485642935noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-10255353296703535912010-06-05T11:01:49.407-04:002010-06-05T11:01:49.407-04:00Hi,
Phew, heck of a lot of characters - imagine a...Hi,<br /><br />Phew, heck of a lot of characters - imagine all that banter (cross-talking) up on the big screen!<br /><br />Great set up though, and one has to read on!!!<br /><br />best<br />FFrancine Howarthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02326542867876257042noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-37450920356111700502010-06-05T10:37:10.532-04:002010-06-05T10:37:10.532-04:00That was great! You have some verrry interesting c...That was great! You have some verrry interesting characters. :)Susan Fieldshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02433408456603462774noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-78202908225168813972010-06-05T09:31:31.737-04:002010-06-05T09:31:31.737-04:00hehehe
oh dear that was funny! I love the back-an...hehehe <br />oh dear that was funny! I love the back-and-forth interrupting-each-other dialogue! Sooo typical of a group of old friends! <br /><br />Although I have to agree with Charity a little - it's not always clear who's talking and how many people there are, exactly.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11046724975658216337noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6669763793815784823.post-3222553480675697492010-06-05T09:15:02.392-04:002010-06-05T09:15:02.392-04:00:) There are so many names I kept getting confused...:) There are so many names I kept getting confused. Then toward the bottom I went "Oh."<br /><br />Hee hee. The whole time I had all these ideas of what might happen. Who was going to kill who and so on. It was really fun not knowing for sure what was going to happen. <br /><br />Fun stuff!Charity Bradfordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01960821077619680661noreply@blogger.com